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12 April 2013 @ 09:25 pm
21 first lines meme  
So this is all over my f-list and it was fun to do, like going backwards in a fic time machine - 'oh, so that's why I started writing Avengers fic' and 'there was my fling with Sherlock' *grins*. The last twenty-one first lines I wrote in fanfic. I'd love to be asked about them, or have people point out any trend that they can spot.

1) Natalia Alianova Romanova has always wanted to know.

2) It starts with ashes to ashes, dust to dust.

3) For as long as he can remember Clint has always been getting into trouble for seeing things that he shouldn’t, or rather for getting caught at it.

4) When Colin opens the door the man waiting outside, who seems incapable of taking his finger off the doorbell, is saying to someone on his mobile phone, “Look, I hate magic, okay?”

5) “Once upon a time,” begins the storyteller.

6) He wakes in the night with a sharp intake of breath that cuts up his insides, flinging back the covers as he launches up into a sitting position.

7) He’s always careful when he does it.

8) When they ask for her name she tells them, “Anastasia.”

9) She is born after the Berlin Wall comes down and before the collapse of the USSR, when some believe that the world will carry on as it is whilst others see the fall rushing towards them and reach out desperately, both kinds snatching at anything they think may be of use.

10) “They’re not AWOL or MIA or any other acronym that you can come up with,” says Fury when people demand from him the whereabouts of the Avengers.

11) “Come on,” Tony goads, dropping onto the couch next to Bruce without spilling a single drop of his whiskey.

12) It was Coulson, because of everyone at SHIELD he's always been the best at getting rid of curious or journalistic types.

13) “Do you have any plans for tonight?” Martha asks her, folding her arms and perching gracefully on the edge of Tosh’s desk without touching anything or knocking anything over.

14) Simon knows about being broken and pushing yourself to be the best.

15) Natasha finds Clint on the pinnacle of Stark Tower, crouching at the edge and aiming his single remaining arrow at a number of targets below, shifting his position repeatedly and favouring his left leg

16) John doesn’t make excuses anymore when he knocks on her door and tells her that once again he’s leaving the clinic before his shift is over.

17) This woman radiates life, so much so that Death wouldn’t think she was dead if she weren’t Death and knew these things.

18) “John Watson,” the receptionist announces as she opens the door to the therapist’s office and ushers him in with a polite smile.

19) After spending so long living on the TARDIS, when it could be any time of any day that you wanted and the only thing that could possibly be called a routine was sex with Rory after an adventure, Amy had expected that adjusting to a ‘normal’ working week would be awkward.

20) “I like him,” says Donna, blowing across the surface of her tea to cool it.

21) He watches as the slim streak of nothing in jeans and a black bra slams her fist into the oncoming punch of her far larger opposition and because he’s got better senses than most he can see that it drains the guy much more than the girl, even though she’s the one that staggers back.
feeling: curiouscurious
Frea O'Scanlin: Clintasha 2frea_o on April 12th, 2013 09:01 pm (UTC)
Heh, the only trend I spotted is your love for present tense. Probably the lamest observation ever, but as somebody who's still learning to love present tense (I'm all for limited third, past tense in my writing, apparently), it just stands out to me. I applaud.
inkvoicesinkvoices on April 12th, 2013 09:14 pm (UTC)
...y'know, I can't actually remember when I started using the present tense for fics instead of the past tense, but now it's apparently my default. Huh. I did always used to use the past tense (and never first or second person, which I still don't do).
Frea O'Scanlin: Clintashafrea_o on April 12th, 2013 10:01 pm (UTC)
I write in first person when it's original, but it feels weird and wrong for fic. Second person only works if it's done really, really well, so I avoid it like the plague.
inkvoicesinkvoices on April 12th, 2013 10:08 pm (UTC)
I'm okay reading first person, for some reason writing it always made/makes me twitch. I don't know, maybe because there's less distance between yourself and what you're writing? Seconding what you said about second person *grins*.
alphaflyer on April 13th, 2013 04:02 am (UTC)
I switched to the present tense halfway through my fic writing for the shorter pieces; for my longer Voyager stories (currently working on Part 3 of a trilogy) I still use past, for consistency's sake. I love the immediacy, although recounting past events from the present tense can give you a headache.

I'm about to try my first "first person" piece, for a Voyager secret drabble exchange. Can't see myself doing it more than once, though.
inkvoicesinkvoices on April 14th, 2013 09:16 pm (UTC)
Any idea why you switched to the present tense, or just tried it out and liked it? I vaguely seem to remember that there were some word choices I wanted that just weren't the same in past tense. And then I seem to have gotten stuck in the present, heh.

Good luck!
alphaflyer on April 14th, 2013 09:42 pm (UTC)
past and present
Well, I chickened out of the first person for my Voyager piece. Instead I took on the challenge of writing a "ship" that I abhor (Janeway/Chakotay -- he would bore her to death inside a month, I swear ...) since that is what the requester wanted. They gave the option of a friendship piece with either and a third character, and so I wrote the piece as if it was that, with a twist for a J/C ship at the end. (Looooong shower tonight!!!)

Anyway. Present tense. I think my first present tense piece was also my first attempt at doing Something Really Short, a sort-of five times drabble fic ("Ten Random Things Tom Paris Regrets (Not) Doing, and One He Doesn't Mind So Much, In Hindsight"). In the absence of a wider story arc in each of the segments, I wanted the immediacy of the deep POV. It worked rather well, if I may say so, and I ... liked it.

Avengers stories lend themelves to the present tense nicely; there's a slight breathlessness to the action and the snarky vernacular that works better in the present, I think.

IBy contrast, the past tense works better with longer stories that take time to unfold and have several plot strands and themes running through; my 12-15 chapter pieces in the Voyager fandom I still write in the past tense.
no matter how improbable: random mochacharlottetrips on April 13th, 2013 04:28 am (UTC)
The only trend I see is more Avengers than anything else. :)

This one made me want to read the fix it started: 4) When Colin opens the door the man waiting outside, who seems incapable of taking his finger off the doorbell, is saying to someone on his mobile phone, “Look, I hate magic, okay?”

Feel free to point the way ;)
inkvoicesinkvoices on April 14th, 2013 09:20 pm (UTC)
I think all my Avengers fics are in there. I haven't written that many. Yet ;)

That's Five People That Tony Stark Never Made A Suit For (And One He Did), if you like crossovers :)